20 July 2011

July Excerpt of "Violets Are Blue"

Methinks you all will like this month's excerpt. :)

“You’ll never guess what I…” I started to say as I opened the apartment door.
“Violet!” I heard Anna say in annoyance. “I just scrubbed the floor! Look where you’re going!”
“Oops! Sorry, Anna,” I apologized. 
“Where’s Mum?” Emma asked curiously, entering the room.
“She decided to stay an extra shift at the factory,” I answered. “She was hoping to make more money to bring home to Father.”
“All the better,” Emma said.
I turned towards her, confused. “Why did you say “all the better” like that?”
“We’re trying to get the fall cleaning done before Mum comes home,” she whispered. 
“It’ll be a grand surprise!” Anna said, joining in.
I sure hope it’s grand,” Helen commented sourly, coming through the door. She was heaving a heavy mattress outside to air. “Emma’s making me do all the hard work! It’s not fair.”
“Where are the boys?” I questioned Emma.
“They went to help Father with one of his carpentry jobs. He said he might put them to work.” She winked at me.
“Ah…” I said, understanding.
“Well, I don’t see how it’s right for them to leave us with all the work!” Helen complained.
“Oh Helen,” I said. “You shouldn’t whine like that.”
“I don’t care!” she said in a contrary tone. “If I want to whine, I will!”
Anna stopped the argument midway.
“Violet,” she said. “What’s that in your hand?”

4 comments:

  1. Ooooh!! Did you have to leave off at that part??!!!
    I'm all in suspense!!

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  2. Awww! What a place to leave of at!

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  3. I love the way everyone interacts! Plus, Lizzy, you do dialogue beautifully. I never could get the hang of that.

    Love ya,
    Brianna

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  4. I love it! that is a very nice way to leave us all hanging! It makes me want t read the book!

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